~Fernspirit~ TC Medicine Cat

[dukeduke]

name... Fernspirit

gender... She-cat

age... 19 moons

group... ThunderClan

rank... Medicine Cat

reference... Solid black she-cat with green eyes

appearance... Fernspirit is a dainty cat. She has a thin body and long thin legs with small paws. Her coat is soft, thick, and colored a very dark black. Her eyes are a striking green, and they rarely show her emotion. Her tail is long and thin, but has a slight crook at the end of it.

personality... Fernspirit has a bold personality. She stands up for what she thinks and rarely takes no for an answer. She is intelligent in herbs, and ways to get apprentices to take them when they need to. She is gentle when it comes to nursing queens, because she loves kits. She has a quick temper and low tolerance level when she's not treating a patient.

history... Fernspirit was born in ThunderClan. She had an easy birth, no problems whatsoever. She, Ashkit, and Pinekit were pretty healthy kits. The leafbare after their birth, Pinekit and Ashkit caught greencough. Ashkit survived the disease, but Pinekit died. When it came time for them to be apprenticed, her brother was very excited to be a warrior. Fernspirit was much more interested in herbs, StarClan, and healing her clanmates, so she became medicine cat apprentice. Her brother continued his training and got his warrior name. She continued learning and received her name later than him.

acquaintances...
Ripplepad- Fernspirit's deceased mother
Brambleheart- Fernspirit's deceased father
Ashwind- Fernspirit's brother
Vineleaf- Fernspirit's mentor
Pinekit- Fernspirit's deceased brother



notes...
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[Darkiez =D]

NAME

No real problem with "Fernspirit" as a name, but could you please explain why a queen would name a black kitten after a fern? She could have renamed her after her eyes became un-blue, but her eyes are yellow, so it still doesn't make sense.

HISTORY

A bit too short...the other sections could use some expanding, but this one needs it. Make sure you've got at least three (preferably more) sentences about each stage of her life.

ACQUAINTANCES

I have trouble believing anyone would name a cat "Shadowbreath", for two reasons:

1. "Shadow" is the name of a Clan, and is therefore sacred.
2. "Breath" is...an OK suffix, but a bit un-warrior-like, if you catch my drift. If you desperately want to keep it, fine, but I'd prefer it if it were changed.

Also: Pinekit should be listed as an acquaintance.

Other than that, I'm just gonna show you all your typos. ^^

"Thunder Clan" [ThunderClan]
"Medicine Cat?" [Medicine Cat]
"Fernleaf" [Fernspirit]
'Thin' and 'color' are used a lot--not a mistake, but you might want to use synonyms
"Windkit" [Pinekit]

Good work on this one ^^

~ your friendly neighborhood Darkiez =D!admin

[dukeduke]

I'll edit the history later, 'cause I'm not sure what else I could say about her history.
As for her name, I'm not sure why she would name a kit after a fern if it was black, I just liked the name Fernspirit and a black cat seemed fitting for the name in my mind. I can change it if you want.

[Darkiez =D]