Post by Darkiez =D on Jul 5, 2009 5:58:52 GMT -5
GROUP
Rouge = Rogue
PERSONALITY
tounge = tongue
discipline,silence, = discipline, silence,
Also: Diamond seems incredibly sadistic, with no good traits to balance out her lust for killing and no real explanation of her murderous attitude in her history. The only truly sadistic cat in the whole site should be Thorn, who was driven insane because she couldn't control her feelings of envy and mistreatment (that's the most I can tell you for now, sorry). Unless you can come up with a reason that she was driven insane, you need to throw in a few good traits and make her less kill-happy.
HISTORY
often ruined her people's things and attacked them. She attacked the other cat that lived with her and the cats that lived around them. -- This suggests that a) she was born sadistic (which I find extremely hard to believe) and b) her Twolegs weren't very bright. If my cat ruined my things, attacked me/my possessions/my family, attacked my other cat, and attacked my neighbor's cats, I'd send that cat away ASAP.
rouges = rogues
She joined them and soon became Ambush Leader. -- You can't just gloss over her RB history until the time she became Ambush Leader, which was after Eaglestar was attacked and killed. Her brother Ace was Ambush Leader before her; she was originally a hunter, with Club. Plus she fell in love with Club (your choice as to whether she still likes him), was temporarily kicked out of the RB b/c she was expecting Club's kit, mothered Heart, and was accepted back into the RB with Heart when Thorn realized how useful they could be.
ACQUAINTANCES
There's no mention of her brother Ace (who traveled with her and joined the RB with her), her mate Club (who, by fathering Heart, got her temporarily kicked out of the RB), or her daughter Heart (whose existence got her temporarily kicked out of the RB).
